Monday, April 28, 2014
Thesis Statement
Being able to repair a computer systems can help you to save money and time, the industry is constantly growing with new companies opening up like, "IFix it" and "DIY". Knowing the hardware of your computer can help you navigate it better, and is a great skill to know with the technological industry rapidly increasing.
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The ideas contained within this thesis statement are strong and certainly serve as the basis for your paper; however, how might you combine the sentences into one and make it more succinct? What, ultimately, are you trying to prove about the benefit of understanding computer systems? You state it, but it could be worded more precisely.
ReplyDeleteI think maybe if I take out the direct companies and cut straight to the chase I would be able to make it more short and to the point.
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